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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packing are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuas to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #government #individuas
The
last
 two centuries saw a
rapidly
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 increase in the
use
 of
plastic
 products,
such
 as bags, bottles and
packging
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packaging
 as an
efficent
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efficient
 way to transport and keep all
sort
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 of
good
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goods
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.
However
, all these
plastic
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plastics
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 have become a huge problem to
environment
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the environment
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 because not only
they
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do they
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 take thousands of years to decay but
also
 they increase
the
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polution's
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 problems.
Plastic
 products after being used become garbage which causes
as
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 lot of
damages
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damage
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 to
environment
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the environment
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. Many people throw away their
plastic
 bottles or bags in the oceans, rivers and lakes.
This
 behaviour is the main cause of
dead
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 of many fishes around the world.
Furthermore
, they
polute
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pollute
 the reefs, beaches and other areas for many centuries. In order to reduce
this
 problem governments should take some attitudes. First of all, they should
prohibite
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prohibit
prohibited
 the
use
 of
plastic
 in the
manufactoring
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manufacturing
 of all
kind
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kinds
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 of things.
Secondly
, they should
estimulate
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stimulate
estimate
 the research of other methods of packing and
also
estimulate
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estimate
 the
use
 of other packings that are easier to decay,
such
 as paper.
Finally
, they should tax people who
polute
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pollute
 the environment more severely.
In addition
, each individual should do their part to reduce
this
 problem as well. People in general should avoid the
use
 of
plasic
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plastic
 products and mainly,
the
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they
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 should throw them away in the correct places and not in places where it will cause environmental problems. In conclusion,
it is clear that
 the damages caused by the
use
 of plastics overweight their benefits and governments and the public
in general
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 should
do
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make
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 an effort to solve
this
 issue, each one in their area of action.
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