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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #road #safety #age #car #motorbike
There is a wide perception in many parts of the world currently
that is
 increasing the
persons
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 who
aredriving
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are driving
age
, the most effective method to enhance the
safety
 of the roads. from my
perspective
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,perspective
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this
 idea is completely flawed.
due to
 the fact that the roads
itself
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themselves
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 should improve
as well as
 the traffic organisation should be regularly monitoring. one point which I believe to be absolutely pivotal is the fact that all roads should be well constructed in order to the human
safety
. on other words
road
 construction is a really significant aspect of the person's
safety
while
 driving since if there
is
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are
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 any obstacles to the
road
 or any curvature or the
road
 in uneven it will lead to a horrible accident and it may lead to death.
for example
, a study done by USA University
that is
 around 30% of
road
 accident occurs because of unpredictable
road
 obstacles. so that,
government
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the government
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 should consider
the
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apply
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road
 construction and make regular
checking
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checks
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 every 6 months.
on the other hand
, increasing the minimum
age
 of
people
 who
drive
 will burden others from driving.
this
 is in order to
drive
 a car can be a skill and talent for young
people
 .
beside
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, they can
drive
 in a professional way. so that they should have the fortune to do what they want.
for example
, Samo Hosni is a familiar well skilled driver, he had many prizes in a lot of car competitions. and in his interview, he mentioned that he began driving
the
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 car when he was 18 years and he grew his driving skills at that
age
. so the person should have the opportunity to
drive
 after confirming that he can
drive
 safely.
as
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 a result, I believe the government should not increase the
age
 of drivers and
instead
 of that they can give a driving licence to the
people
 who are worth that. In conclusion, Despite increasing the minimum
age
 of the
people
 who are allowed to
drive
, the government can give the driving license to trusted
people
as well as
 improve
the
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road
 construction for
safety
 reasons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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