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The world’s natural resources such as oil, forests, and freshwater are being consumed at an ever-increasing rate. What are the dangers of the situation? what can be done to solve the problem?

#world’s #resources #oil #forests #rate #dangers #situation
In the modern era, the consuming process of wildlife, clean water and other fundamental natural
resources
 are being soared
at
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 its high point. Those main
resources
 are decreasing day by day
due to
high
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 consuming society. First of all, the main danger of overconsuming water and green
resources
 is
primarly
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primarily
 not to exert them in the next 2nd quarter of the
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 century.
Therefore
 each human being on
this
 earth shouldn't take the situation for granted.
Thusthe
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Thus the
 output of the consuming water and green
resources
 should end up with the extinction of them. Putting into effect the ecological regulations and sustainable goals by the authorities would be the best way to protect our natural habitat. Second of all, each country should generally take into account the importance of interstate
relationsips
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relationships
, which has a huge role
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 making a better world.
Likewise
, the startling thing is that international relationships in the
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 century play a significant role to protect
the
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nature and to maintain a sustainable world for a better future.
Thus
, it
wpuld
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would
 be a
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passive
 thing to organise
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different types of workshops, seminars and festivals to protect
the
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nature.
Finally
, it is supposed that
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 century will make enormous detrimental effects towards natural
resources
.
However
, if rigid
regualtions
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regulations
 are taken into account, the
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 process will decrease.
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