The government should encourage industries and business to move out of big cities and into reginal areas. To what extent do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages.

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by the government to be constructed in
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countryside and rural
area
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instead
of
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a large city
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cities
.
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believe that the merits
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outweigh
the drawbacks
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because In
people
in rural are
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suffering
from
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a lack
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of
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products
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and job
opportunity
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opportunities
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. on the one hand, when
the
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huge factories
moving
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move
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into
antother reginal
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another regional
place it
create
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creates
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a significant effect on the
people
there who are requiring a job.
this
because in that
places
several individuals
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to
travilling
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travelling
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city
to find a suitable occupation with an appropriate salary to survive.
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is
around 60% of
people
in
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India
prefere
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prefer
moving to the city
center
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centre
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( New Delhi) in order to find a
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job
. so that,
government
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the government
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should support all Business in
larg
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large
cities
to move into the rural and regional
places
.
furthermore
,
this
advantage will assist of mitigate
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population
on
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larg
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large
larger
cities
, since
people
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jobs will distribute in many
places
and
this
will create a
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among
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the
people
in the
cities
and regional
places
.
as
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a
resule
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result
, both of them will gain a
confertable
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comfortable
life standard without
overpopulotion
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overpopulation
.
on the other hand
, the main drawback is losses of employment for the
larg
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larger
large
cities
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residents.
this
because
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major of
people
who are living already in
cities
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relying
on
those business
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.
as
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a result of moving to a
diffirent
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different
place, those
people
will
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from unemployment.
nevertheless
,
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will tend to
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their life
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career
care
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, they can reskill
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themselves
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in order to get
an new occupations
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a new occupation
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in
diffirent
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different
sector
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sectors
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. in conclusion,
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my
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perspective
prespective
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belive
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there
is
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enormous
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job
opportunities in
cities
and
any one
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anyone
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can get a
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job easily
in contrast
those
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in regional spots,
finifing
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finding
finishing
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job
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a job
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is really tough. so that, the merits
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are outweighted
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outweighted
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outweighed
by
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the drawbacks.
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