The government should encourage industries and business to move out of big cities and into reginal areas. To what extent do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages.

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a significant effect on the
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there who are requiring a job.
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several individuals
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to find a suitable occupation with an appropriate salary to survive.
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, A study conducted by USA University that
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around 60% of
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moving to the city
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to move into the rural and regional
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jobs will distribute in many
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will create a
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life standard without
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a result of moving to a
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opportunities in
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can get a
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in contrast
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in regional spots,
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is really tough. so that, the merits
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the drawbacks.

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