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Many people believe that country should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible. What extent do you agree or disagree ?

It is often assumed by many individuals that every nation should produce enough amount of food to lessen the trend of buying it from outside sources.
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 I agree with
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 ideology, I think that agricultural production for all types of crops should not be encouraged
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 one place. I will
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 elaborate
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 abovementioned partial view
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 the statement in the following paragraphs. To commence with the idea that backup the phenomenon of buying less food from abroad, it would save
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 money. When any territory exports
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 produce to
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nation
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, it levies some additional costs on the exported goods
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 as transportation ,
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 and taxation charges. To mitigate
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 issue, more harvesting is the better option for
populace
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the populace
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 of any country, which could
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 generate more revenue for their own people with few other benefits.
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, India is the biggest cotton producer in the world, which allows its residents to make
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purchase at a meagre cost and
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 sell it to other regions at
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 cost. Henceforth, it is vivid that
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 point offers monetary benefits to both country and its occupants.
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, it is good to import
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agricultural produce at some point.
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 is because, no country can yield all types of food grains, because of its geographical location and weather conditions. To exemplify, Canada is a place that
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 severe cold weather conditions, where all kinds of crops cannot be harvested and government have to buy
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 from other parts of the world to fulfil the needs of their populace.
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, regions with harsh climatic conditions heavily depend on imports, which is an appropriate option for them to support the livelihood of their people. In brief, it can be considered that both trends have their own significance that depends completely on the need and choice of the particular region, which one to follow, based on various factors to support the nation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food security
  • domestic production
  • import dependency
  • political instability
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • nutritional deficiencies
  • comparative advantage
  • agricultural methods
  • local economies
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