The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has the opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

The development of technological devices has an in-deep
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in
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our modern life.
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is believed to
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the disparity between the
weathy
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wealthy
and the poor,
whereas
others think is
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. I
also
agree with those who consider that
this
gap is the
causes
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of technology. Granted, there are powerful reasons to make life more
convinient
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convenient
and
fulfilled
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for those who own
the
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electronic equipment.
Firstly
, the
lastest
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invention like
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the smart
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smart phone
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smartphone
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encourages
people
who can catch up with the information via
internet
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or Wi-fi.
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been the same way
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daily duties
througout
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through
the
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email or social networks
such
as Zalo or Twitter. Another reason is that the internet which is widely free in public departures
to
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create
people
to broaden
knowledge
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their knowledge
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whenever they set up. Both students who
raised
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in
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the
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rich kids can register
the
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online course with
the
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reasonable fee.
On the other hand
, I
also
believe that the drawbacks of these innovations in
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specific fields. Obviously, it can be seen in medical treatment which has the high-cost
expenduture
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expenditure
expenditures
in the same decease like cancer or
hopeless
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case.
Therefore
, the
people
who can afford the hospital fees may have been cured with
the
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expensive drug and costly
caretakes
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caretakers
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.
In contrast
, the
people
without money, who worry about the need for day-to-day life cost, how can they pick up their
mind
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about these issues. The other problem is that these devices are
producted
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produced
by many brands with
a
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plenty of prices from low to high. Its qualities are associated with its cost.
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,
BMW
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the BMW
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car which is compared with
KIA
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the KIA
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Morning car,
that
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is not
pratical
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practical
. In summary, I would argue that the advantages of
this
improvement,
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although
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this
can
brigde
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bridge
the gap between the rich folk and the poor.
However
, that can lead to
the
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wide distance in
community
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the community
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because of
this
frequency separation in each
products
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product
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.
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