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The Internet is probably the most significant invention of the last 30 years. Without it, our lives would be completely different. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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We have to recognize that the
Internet
 brings many benefits and it
also
 opens a new age for humans, but
that is
 a fraction of it. It can be a great crucial invention in some developed countries,
whereas
 in developing countries, it is just a small need of poor communities
such
 as a few regions in Africa. The individuals here just need a peaceful life with the availability of electricity, freshwater or enough food
instead
 of suffering some problems namely famine or drought. It is not certain that the
Internet
 is the most essential invention in recent years. Actually, the
Internet
 has contributed to the development processes of human beings. It helps nations to integrate with the world in their economy and culture.
As a result
, the image of every state has been propagandized on the world wide web and it makes a good impression on many
people
 from around the world. Through that thing, the number of tourists every year has rapidly increased and the profits are very high as well. It
also
 provides information for
people
 in the best way with a lot of information resources.
Finally
, the
internet
 helps
people
 keep in touch with each other more easily and it is
also
 means of entertainment,
people
 can enjoy and relax by watching movies or listening to
podcast
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.
However
, the
Internet
 is caused many negative impacts on human life too. It makes
people
 distracted from their work or study. These days, it has many things created so as to disturb them and they cannot resist temptation
such
 as bad websites or many video games.
As a consequence
, the productivity of their work is worse and worse. They cannot concentrate on something that they want to do. It
also
 reduces the ability to communicate because if
people
 spend a lot of time looking at the screen and just communicate with the keyboard, they will become a person that doesn’t have good skills to communicate with their relatives or friends. In my opinion, I think most inventions have two sides and it is up to the individuals. It depends on how they use the
internet
 whether it is right or not and everybody should take care
for
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global village
  • Telecommunication
  • Internet of Things (IoT)
  • E-commerce
  • Digital literacy
  • Cybersecurity
  • Telecommuting
  • Disruptive technology
  • Virtual reality
  • Artificial intelligence
  • Digital divide
  • Information superhighway
  • Cyberspace
  • Online presence
  • Smart technology
  • Data encryption
  • Cloud computing
  • Social networking
  • Streaming services
  • Remote collaboration
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