One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is liberation in thoughts. Now people are beginning to realize that freedom of speech is vital important for society. In my opinion, I tend to agree with that sentence.
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is liberation in thoughts. Now
people
are beginning to realize that freedom of speech is vital
important for society. In my opinion, I tend to agree with that sentence.
Change the adjective
vitally
Firstly
, it is well known that freedom of speech expresses ideas
of the Correct article usage
the ideas
people
regardless of social level. One of the main reasons behind that is
people
can not feel fenced in choice, then
cannot be arrest
by staffs of justice. A good case in point is Sweden, Wrong verb form
arrested
good
country for living and occupation. There Correct article usage
a good
are
no punishment about own opinion, even no censorship of Change the verb form
is
the
CNN. Correct article usage
apply
People
are free in expression and can convey themselves
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their
opinion
without fear of Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
law
.
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the law
On the other hand
, it can also
be argued that the government want to hear citizens
of Correct article usage
the citizens
them
country. Change the pronoun
their
That is
to say
comments by Add a comma
,say
people
can enhance the living standard that also
improve
loyalty to Change the verb form
improves
government
. Take Add an article
the government
for example
it is Switzerland, the
country Correct article usage
a
that
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apply
divided
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is divided
by
24 independent states, and Change preposition
into
in
every state has chosen governor by citizens. Every year they are holding a referendum roughly 3-4 times Change preposition
apply
a
per year. There was a question about Correct article usage
apply
usage
of cosmetics Add an article
the usage
to
animals and each citizen had Change preposition
by
right
to choose. Correct article usage
the right
Then
it is
significantly changed the attitude to cosmetics and attitude to the government.
In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can Unnecessary verb
apply
sat
that freedom of speech Correct your spelling
say
actually
important for Add a missing verb
is actually
community
and in general it Add an article
the community
is make
us an individual personality.Change the verb form
makes
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite