One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is liberation in thoughts. Now people are beginning to realize that freedom of speech is vital important for society. In my opinion, I tend to agree with that sentence.

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is liberation in thoughts. Now
people
are beginning to realize that freedom of speech is
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important for society. In my opinion, I tend to agree with that sentence.
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, it is well known that freedom of speech expresses
ideas
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of the
people
regardless of social level. One of the main reasons behind
that is
people
can not feel fenced in choice,
then
cannot be
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by staffs of justice. A good case in point is Sweden,
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country for living and occupation. There
are
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no punishment about own opinion, even no censorship of
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CNN.
People
are free in expression and can convey
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opinion
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without fear of
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.
On the other hand
, it can
also
be argued that the government want to hear
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of
them
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country.
That is
to
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comments by
people
can enhance the living standard that
also
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loyalty to
government
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. Take
for example
it is Switzerland,
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country
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divided
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24 independent states, and
in
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every state has chosen governor by citizens. Every year they are holding a referendum roughly 3-4 times
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per year. There was a question about
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of cosmetics
to
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animals and each citizen had
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to choose.
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significantly changed the attitude to cosmetics and attitude to the government. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can
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that freedom of speech
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important for
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and in general it
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us an individual personality.
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