The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The chart show the result of a survey asking visitors how satisfied they are with their visit during the same two periods.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The chart show the result of a survey asking visitors how satisfied they are with their visit during the same two periods.

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The two charts provide information on the satisfaction scores of the people who visited the Ashdown museum one year pre- and post-refurbishment.

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, it can be seen that the satisfaction scores were improved after the museum's construction. Looking at the charts, the survey showed more guests feeling 'satisfied' after it was refurbished, as it increased from three-tenths to two-fifths, which was the highest score in the new survey. The new building

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raised the 'very satisfied' rating from less than a fifth to just over a third of the guests.

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although

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the majority (two fifth) of the people were feeling dissatisfied with the old building,

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this

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number was significantly reduced to less than a fifth after its refurbishment.

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to that, the number of visitors who reported feeling very dissatisfied was

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reduced by half after the construction.

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, the 'no response' score had no changes, at 5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

150 words

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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The chart show the result of a survey asking visitors how satisfied they are with their visit during the same two periods.

Some people think books are losing important as a source od information and entertainmnet. To what extent do you agree?

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To solve the problem of environmental pollution we need to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?