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Some people think that we should replace old buildings and houses in cities with more modern buildings. Other people think we should protect old buildings. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant experience from your own experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Part of the population believes that building new structures for the purpose of replacing the old ones in modern cities is necessary,
while
 another group considers old
buildings
 very important and need to be reserved and maintained. In my opinion, we need to protect the old mansions, castles and historical places,
however
, there are a lot of old
buildings
 that have no cultural value and need to be removed because they are treating the safety of their residents. On the one hand, the supporters of replacing old
buildings
 argue that these
buildings
 are lacking the practicality and services that modern life requires.
For instance
, we can't install an elevator in most city centres'
buildings
 because of their design and building materials.
Moreover
, the old residency complexes are not safe and have low living standers compared to modern
buildings
 .
For instance
, in Rome in 2008 , 4
buildings
 built in 1953 collapsed and 13 people died, and if those
buildings
 were replaced with modern ones, the catastrophe would never happen.
On the other hand
, the population who want to protect the old building are arguing that these structures have historical and cultural values, and some of them are shaping the cities' identities.
In addition
, the old house is a part of the local theme and removing it will damage the urban spirit and is very important for tourist reasons .
For example
, a study done by New Orleans University in 2015, concludes that replacing the old houses on Bourbon Street with the new
buildings
 will decrease the visitors' number to half. In my view, both opinions are right in specific situations, the old building that has no cultural or historical value need to be replaced with new
buildings
 that are safer and more modern,
while
 the old houses and structures that mark the cities and attract visitors should be protected and treated with care.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • paramount
  • evolutionary journey
  • tangible link
  • fostering
  • sense of belonging
  • architectural beauty
  • economic benefit
  • tourist attractions
  • preservation techniques
  • structural integrity
  • energy-efficient
  • sustainable architecture
  • cultural preservation
  • urban demands
  • contemporary lifestyles
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