The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The line graph compares the annual amount of shop closures and
openings
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in one country in the period from 2011 to 2018.
It is clear that
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both the
number
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of newly opened shops and closed stores experienced relative fluctuations over the 9-year period. The year 2014 marks the point at which the
number
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of shop
openings
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overtook that of shop closures. In 2011, investors opened around 8500 new shops in one country, compared to only around 6300 stores that closed.
Then
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the annual
openings
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had a dramatic fall in 2012 at approximately 4000,
while
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the
number
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of closed shops dropped by 400 slightly. Over the following 3
years
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, the line of both closures and
openings
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rose over the same period, reaching around 6000 in 2014. In the year 2015, the
number
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of
openings
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stayed roughly the same for the next 3
years
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and
finally
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had a slight decline in the
last
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year 2018. Between the
years
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2014 to 2016, the shutdown of stores changed dramatically and later remained constant in the final three
years
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words openings, number, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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