The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from eggs to adult fish.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from eggs to adult fish.
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The diagram illustrates the different stages of reproduction of a salmon in the river
as well as
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the ocean and its growth in various water bodies.
Overall
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, there are 3 unique places where the fish grow.
Although
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the growth occurs in all 3 regions, in freshwater, the backwater and the sea,
however
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, the birth of these fishes takes place in the river and they become mature in the ocean.
Firstly
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, in the river, the adult salmon spawns the eggs which are
then
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incubated.
After
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this
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, the eggs hatch and small hatchlings emerge out of them. These hatchlings are reared in the freshwater for some time before they can move into the estuary for
further
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rearing.
Furthermore
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, the slightly grown salmon migrate to the ocean where they attain maturation in the seawater.
Finally
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, the fishes return back to the spawning areas in the freshwater for reproduction, laying eggs there. The cycle repeats all over again.
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