The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of

new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
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The
line
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chart illustrates the number of closures and opening
shops
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in a country from 2011 to 2016.
Overall
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, there is an insignificant fluctuation in the
line
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of closed
shops
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in 2015, the opened
shops
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line
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was about to decrease over the period, and its figure did not change dramatically. On the Closure
line
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, it has remained balanced in the number of
shops
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from when it started in 2011 until 2014 passed, decreasing rapidly and jumping up in 2016. After that, the figure was recorded stay about 5000 to above. On the opposite side, The Openings dropped in the first years, but over time for 2 years 2012 to 2014. It slightly increases from under 4000 to 6100 and continues to drop by 2000
shops
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in 2015. Stay in above 4000 and the figures
finally
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ended at point 3000
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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