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some people think it is a good idea to wear a uniform at work . Do you agree or disagree ?

#people #idea #uniform #work
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some individuals believe it is a good idea to dress
a
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uniform
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work
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. I totally agree with
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 statement on the grounds that
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uniform
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 can bring many benefits including eliminating
discrimination
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, creating
sense
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a sense
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of identiy
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identiy
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identity
identify
 among
employees
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, and
economical
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being economical
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 for
emplyees
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employees
employers
.
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 with, there are several reasons why I think
uniform
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 at
work
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 is
good
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 trend.
Firstly
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,
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uniform
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uniforms
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 at
work
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 can contribute to eliminating
discrimination
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 in workplace environments. To illustrate, if all staff wear the same clothes
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 mean
emolyees wil
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employees will
 become less vulnerable to exposure to bullying against clothes.
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, less
discrimination
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mean
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means
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productivity of
employees
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 will enhance, which
mean
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means
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employees
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 will perform well in their takes.
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, if the productivity of
employees
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 increases the
companies
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 will earn more money result of services the
employees
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 will provide for their customers will become better.
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,
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uniform
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uniforms
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 at
work
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 will create a sense of belonging among
employees
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 toward their
companies
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.
This
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 is because
employees
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 who wear
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uniform
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uniforms
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 at
work
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 are more likely to continue with their
companies
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 for
long
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a long
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 time, which
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this
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apply
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can reduce cases of quit from jobs among workers.
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,
less
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fewer
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 cases of
quit
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quitting
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 among
employees
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 mean
companies
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 are more likely to become successful
companies
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.
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,
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uniform
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uniforms
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 at
work
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 can save a considerable amount of money for
employees
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. To illustrate,
uniform
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 often is affordable, which mean easy for all
emoplyees
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employees
 to purchase
it
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them
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.
To sum up
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, I completely think
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uniform
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uniforms
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 at
work
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 can bring many advantages for
companies
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 namely,
mtigate
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mitigate
discrimination
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,
create
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creating
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 a sense of identity among
employees
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, and
it
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apply
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inexpensively.
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