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The chart below shows the literacy rates of three different continents between 1930 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the literacy rates of three different continents between 1930 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart showed the
literacy
rate
among
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in
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 three different areas from 1930 to 2000.
Although
 the
literacy
rate
 showed
big
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a big
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 difference at 15%, 39% and 68% in 1930, respectively, the difference gap became reduced in 2000.
Overall
, there was always the highest
literacy
rate
 in North
America
. It grew up gradually than
other
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the other
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 two continents.
However
, the
rate
 of
literacy
 in North
America
 was stable after 1970. The
literacy
rate
was
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rose
up
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rapidly in Asia
while
 the
percent
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per cent
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 of
rate
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the rate
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 fell in North
America
. The
rate
 was under 40
percent
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per cent
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 in 1930 but it reached
to
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over 89
percent
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per cent
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. It was the same result in North
America
 in 2000. It showed
the
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fast growth in Asia.
Finally
, the
literacy
rate
 in Africa rose
up
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normally
exept
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except
expect
 between 1940 and 1950. The growth of
literacy
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the literacy
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rate
 between 1940 and 1950 was faster than others.
Although
 the
rate
 increased, it was the lowest
rate
 in the graph.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words literacy, rate, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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