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In many parts of the world, families were larger in the past because people had more children. Do you think there were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a large family in the past?

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Family is sacred to everyone. In the past, every family had a lot of
children
 because they were big. There were advantages and disadvantages to living in a large family. In my opinion, living in a large family has several advantages.
For example
, first of all, the family is friendly and kind to each other when they live in a big family.
Secondly
, a big family makes a person stronger, individually, mentally and emotionally, and family helps in passing the traditional and cultural heritage from one generation to another. In a large ,family
children
 can learn what they do not know by asking adults and no one is left alone in a difficult situation. The main thing is that they never get bored.
On the other hand
, living in a large family has several disadvantages. One of them, large family sizes may lead to a scarcity of basic amenities like food, health and clothing. If they do not eat enough, they may have health problems. When the family have a lot of
children
 parents do not earn money for their
children
's education and clothes. If
children
 do not get enough education, they cannot become mature people.
To sum up
, the family teaches us the mantras of success in life like discipline, consistency hard work cleanliness and morality. I believe that can only achieve my aims with the support of my family which helps me have a stronger future.
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The introduction lacks clarity and does not fully address the task. Ensure that the introduction clearly presents the main topic and the writer's opinion on the topic.
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The logical structure of the essay is somewhat maintained, but there is a need for more coherence and cohesion between paragraphs. Use appropriate linking words and transitional phrases to enhance the flow of ideas.

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