In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion?

In many countries, some
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needed that
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spend expend
spend spend
a lot of money on building the
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latest
railway
lines
for expeditious trains
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. Some argue that the best
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huge amount of money on developing existing public transit. I believe,
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upgrading existing public
transportation
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helpful, and
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people people
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should spend money on new
railway
lines
. Traffic is one of the major problems in Indonesia
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great overpopulation and how to overcome these problems
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creating new innovations in
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. The best
way
that is
suitable in
this
era is to create modern
railway
lines
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because
this
kind of
transport
does not depend on traffic and it is the least affected by bad weather.
For example
, when someone is in a hurry and they need
transportation
that can move fast without any constraints
then
,
railway
lines
are the best option to solve the problem so,
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need for some of the latest forms of
railway
lines
such
as upgrades to tracks including shallower curves is required in order to speed up trains between cities.
On the other hand
, making the latest updates to existing public
transportation
is a less costly
way
to innovate. Because basically,
this
way
only utilizes and maximizes the use of existing types of
transport
.
For example
, let's take buses as an example of existing mass transit. Improvement in public
transport
can not only be done from the physical side of the
transport
but can
also
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the
the bus ticketing system
such
as how to make ticketing touchless or fully digitized payment systems.
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, I think any idea that could ameliorate all of the
transportation
’s deficiencies is worth trying, solutions of creating new
railway
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prefer to do than
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maximizing
existing public
transportation
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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