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The pie charts below show the share of the Swiss Watch Market by brand in 2009 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Given are two circle graphs which demonstrate the dynamic of the Swiss market by different product types. The percentage is well illustrated for both 2009 and 2019. From the application perspective, once conventional TV took the largest portion, 34% in 2009,
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 seeing a considerable plunge in 2019, a mere 4%. Another intriguing case is that flat-screen televisions rocked from 8% to a staggering 26% in
this
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 decade.
Similarly
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, cell phones and tablets experienced
such
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 exponential climb from single-digit share to double-digit.
On the other hand
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, laptop and desktop demand dropped relatively smoothly, only declining 6% to 8% respectively. Another intriguing case is that mobile phones rocketed from only 15% in 2009 to their peak of 26%. The most significant discovery in these diagrams is that both traditional TV and computer figures are all eroded by new techs
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 as smartphones and tablets.

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