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Some people think that to spend or enjoy money once they earn it, but others think that to save the money and to enjoy it in the future. What stand do you agree with and Why? Give the specific reasons and examples which support your opinion.

It is undeniable that
money
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 plays an indispensable role in our lives.
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 it is sometimes thought that the incomes should be spent by
people
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 for their entertainment when they earn them, other
people
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 believe that it is more rational to save their earnings in terms of emergency situations in the future. In my opinion, I consider that
people
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 ought to be prepared for unplanned occasions in time to come by saving their
money
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. On the one hand, it is sometimes believed that spending
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 for entertainment in the present life has an essential part to society's mental health.
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, since we only live once, we should enjoy every minute of it by spending wealth whenever we want .
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,
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, results in boosting our moods, which has numerous positive impacts on mental health.
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, the more
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 we spend on entertainment, the less depressed we would be.
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, one of the best ways to overcome depression among women is shopping for clothes.
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, many
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 argue that the unpredicted situations , which might need an ordinate amount of
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, should be considered.
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 means that
people
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 might encounter some insurmountable pecuniary problems in the future , which need to be overcome with a huge amount of
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. If
people
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 did not save
money
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 for these situations, they would struggle with some serious financial issues, which might result in bankruptcy or going to jail. Taking my personal life as an example,
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 year my mother was diagnosed with lung cancer, which has one of the most expensive treatments, and if we did not save our income to use for her medications, she would be dead now. In conclusion,
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people
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 may vary in their opinion, I think that
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 should be attentive to unpredicted occasions
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 as health conditions and their
money
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 should be saved for these circumstances from now on.

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