Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museum outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many
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require an admission fee, others do not. I believe the advantages of
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far outweigh the disadvantages because, without it,
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would not be able to protect their collection well. On the one hand, entrance
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may discourage the number of visitors.
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, in China, all
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are free for Chinese citizens, so low-income families who can not afford places
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as amusement parks and movie theaters, often take their children to
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to spend their weekends. They may stop visiting if they have to pay to enter.
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,
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my observation, most people go there not to appreciate exhibits but to enjoy the free air-conditioning. They make noise and overcrowd the museum.
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, I think decreasing the number of visitors would not be a bad thing.
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, entrance
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allow
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to upkeep their collections.
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changes in climate, natural disasters are happening more and more frequently. By charging admission
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,
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can afford high-tech methods to minimize the impact of these disasters.
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, with revenue from admission
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, the New York City's Whitney Museum of American Art was able to build an up-to-date flooding wall, which protects its works from
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flooding of rivers nearby. I think
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is a great advantage because some of their collections are masterpieces from the past. And keep it safe is important for our cultural heritage. In conclusion, a paid model may deter the number of visitors, I think
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disadvantage far outweighs
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the advantage that the money raised helps the museum to keep its collections well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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