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New technologies provided machines which replaced workers to do certain physical jobs and tasks. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There has been a growing trend of using
machines
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 to handle certain tasks and jobs.
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 the trend is not without disadvantages, the upsides can justify these. On the one hand,
machine
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automation
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 has several drawbacks, mostly environmental.
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the pollution that
machines
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 produce is the clearest downside.
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, air pollution,
such
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 as smog and greenhouse gas emissions, is caused by burning fuel to power
machines
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 and their exhaust emissions, which
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could give rise not only to various respiratory diseases but
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contributes
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 to global warming.
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machines
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 can lead to noise pollution, which can be detrimental to humans in a number of ways. If people are exposed to noise from equipment, especially machinery and construction equipment, they will be susceptible to a number of health problems, including stress, exhaustion and hearing loss.
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,
machine
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automation
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 can be beneficial to humans in many different ways. Thanks to advancements in technology, some computers are now able to conduct business processes with fewer errors than humans.
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, Natural Language Processing (NLP) allows chatbots to understand speech and provide technical support to customers in a variety of industries, including food and retail services.
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,
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 some worry that growing
machine
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automation
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 would result in significant job losses, recent research and studies conducted have indicated that robots can generate more jobs than they eliminate. In fact, The World Economic Forum released a report estimating that by 2025, robots may displace 85 million jobs but even more roles can open
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 of
this
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 shift, 97 million to be exact. In short, the trend has both potential drawbacks and benefits.
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, I believe that the advantages of
machine
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automation
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 are more significant since
machines
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 are playing pivotal roles in almost every aspect of our
life
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lives
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 in today's world.

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