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People living in the 21st century have a better life than people who lived in previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In some opinions, living in today’s society seems better than living in the previous
century
's society. From my personal perspective, I partly agree with
this
 statement. First of all, we need to admit that the world has changed rapidly since the advent of
technology
 in the late 20th
century
. The progress of
technology
 provides us with many benefits. Modern
technology
,
such
 as smartphones, television, and computers, has made our
life
 easier, more convenient and facilitated us to work, study at home.
Also
, many factories apply robots
into
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 the production process to work automatically. So it is hard to imagine a better
life
 without modern
technology
.
Furthermore
, social services like medical services and the educational system, compared to the past, have developed significantly in the
last
 few decades, which can satisfy all of the human demands, and contribute to the modernization of
life
.
However
, living a modern
life
 does not mean that everything is good. Nowadays, people have to face a lot of problems, and one of those is environmental pollution, which was not a crucial problem in the past. Because of urbanisation, a lot of woodlands have been destroyed in order to build infrastructure.
Furthermore
, a huge amount of exhaust fumes from factories and vehicles polluted the air.
This
 problem leads to climate change, ozone layer depletion, and acid rain. It is really harmful to our
life
 Today’s
century
 is not always good in every aspect, though it has many advantages. Every era will have its own problems, and we need to solve the problem in order to build a better
century
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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