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The way that people work today has changed significantly due to development of technology. Discuss the advantages and the disadvatages.

It is a common belief that the changes brought about in workplaces by technological advances have been largely negative.
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, there is a more persuasive argument that these changes have had an
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 positive effect
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 since they allow
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 to
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 in any place. On the one hand,
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technology has blurred the line between
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time
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 and off-
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 is because smartphones and other technological devices have made it much easier to contact
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 after they are finished with
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, supervisors can now encroach upon the private
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 of their employees. In fact, it became
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 a problem in France that it led to a law recognizing the right to disconnect after
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 has finished. French
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 felt that
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 after stated hours is an invasion of their personal
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, so the legislation was passed to allow
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 to avoid
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 communications after company
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,
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technological advances
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 benefited workers giving them the ability to perform their jobs in any physical location.
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 the development of technologies, co-workers or business partners can
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 closely together even if they are not in the same office.
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,
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 can hold video conference meetings with clients in other countries, saving the
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 and money it would take to travel to those destinations.
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, folks are able to check communications well with their phones or laptops,
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 technological ability gives
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freedom
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 to
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 from anywhere.
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, there are some disadvantages to using new technology in the professional
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 sphere.
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, it is evident that the advantages of
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technological advances far outweigh the drawbacks.

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