The pie charts below show the average household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate the average household expenditure in two different countries (
Malaysia
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and
Japan
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) on five different categories (housing, transport, food, health care, and other goods and service) in one particular year (2010).
Overall
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, housing made up the highest proportion of expenditure in
Malaysia
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,
while
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in
Japan
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, it was on other goods and services.
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, both countries had the lowest spending on healthcare. With regards to housing,
Malaysia
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spent more money on it as opposed to
Japan
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at around a third (34%) and approximately a fifth (21%) respectively.
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, the former country had more spending on food compared to the latter by 3%. In terms of other goods and services, people in
Japan
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spend more of their income in
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category than those who were in
Malaysia
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by a small fraction (3%).
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, the Japanese spend double the amount on transportation than
Malaysia
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.
Although
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the Japanese spent more money on healthcare compared to the Malaysian, the difference was very minimal (3%)
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