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Describe the following diagram in about 150 words making comparision.

The provided diagram illustrates the processes involved in the workings of the
fish
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 market business.
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, there are a total of thirteen processes included in the
fish
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 selling market, from the collection to the selling of
fish
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.
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, the
fish
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 are alive until they are cut open. All in all, the foremost task is fishing, which is followed by bringing them to the port.
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, the hunted
fish
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 are put in a
low temperature
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low-temperature
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 environment and
then
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 into
fresh water
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freshwater
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 containers.
This
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 prepares them to be chopped later.
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, after chopping the
fish
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, they are put into boxes with salt water and yellow
coloring
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colouring
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 to prevent contamination.
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, the preserved
fish
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 are smoked to add
flavor
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flavour
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 and
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 packed into cardboard boxes. After that, the boxes are frozen at zero degrees Celsius and stored in
the
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apply
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cold storage.
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, these storage containers are loaded into the distribution trucks to supply the prepared stock to the
fish
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 shops.
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, the product is ready to be sold after arriving in these stores.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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