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Some people think the main benefit of international cooperations is in protection of the environment , while others think that the main benefit is in the world business. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often said that almost each country has a specific foreign policy to make connections with various countries all over the world, in order to meet their needs.
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, some individuals believe that the chief benefit of
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 is to maintain the environment;
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, others reckon that global trade is the objective. In my opinion, the purpose of linking covers both. The conservation of the Earth is one of the significant topics of thought in the twenty-first century.
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 reason, a convention,between societies, is performed each year with the aim of tackling the problems and finding convenient solutions.
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, global warming issues
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 as climate change, and deforestation are the paramount themes discussed around the world, with the purpose of lessening the mentioned issues.
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, all nations do business and some others go into partnership with exterior companies with the help of fostering their economic growth.
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, tons of thousands of date palms are produced and
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exported outside the country, in order to
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 the economic situation and to have
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finance
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.
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 there is a river border contract between countries, the substantial target for
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 is misusing it.
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, they can take advantage of it by acquiring some financial privilege. All things considered, even though many meetings are held
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 the world each year regarding dealing with global problems and finding appropriate methods to mitigate them.
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, trading
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 and making a fortune
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 by the communities.
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, the connections between the countries are both capital and environmental reasons.

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task response
Ensure that your essay directly addresses the prompt and fully explores both views. Develop a clear and coherent argument to support your opinion. Use relevant and specific examples to strengthen your points.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, but the development of the main points could be more organized and coherent. Try to provide a clearer structure and use transition words to connect ideas more effectively.
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