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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays most people are of the opinion that professionals have to be members of the workforce in the countries where they have studied
however
 others believe that those experts are free to choose a
country
 in order to
work
 and live.
To begin
, I think that there are several reasons for these both views.
For example
,
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a larger
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 number of
population
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the population
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 consider that every expert has to
work
 in their own
country
 and give back their debts to the government.
Furthermore
, there is a critical lack of employees in some crucial fields in many countries and
that is
 why professionals should be workers in their native lands.
Also
, these workers can find out discoveries or devise special technological gadgets that will be able to have an important effect and role on
development
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 of countries. As an example, in the first years of the Republic of Turkey, Mustafa Kamal Ataturk who was
a
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 president of that
country
 and establisher, sent numerous young and aptitude residents abroad
such
 as Germany or France in order for education. After completing their education, those students came back to their homeland and commenced
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work
. Turkey developed by 17% in
economy
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 and other fields through
this
 way.
On the other hand
, in my view, everyone has a right to make a decision to do business
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anywhere they want, because there are some people who are not provided and supported by the state and they gain abilities and skills or education with their own ways and efforts. İn addition to these, more often than not,
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 number of specialists can not earn adequate wages for normal life standards.
Therefore
 they think that they do not deserve
this
 type of life and decide to move and
work
 in foreign developed lands. İn conclusion, I am of the opinion that everybody has to be free to make a choice
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country
 or place so as to
work
 and earn money what they want.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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