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Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and they should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #money #tax
A
state
 is a system
that is
 run by the
people
 and for the
people
. A
state
 fulfils many duties for its
people
 and to run efficiently, it requires income.
This
 revenue comes from
taxes
 that
people
 pay to the
state
.
Thus
, paying
taxes
 is absolutely necessary for the
people
. There are so many reasons to support
this
.
First,
a
state
 is a system that funds the development of so many segments including schools, universities, hospitals and so on.
Secondly
, states develop and maintain infrastructure i.e. roads, bridges, parks and they
also
 run public transport systems like buses, trams, rail and airlines. Maintenance of all the systems requires huge funding.
Hence
state
 authorities rely heavily on the tax that
people
 pay. If
people
 do not pay
taxes
, it becomes very difficult for the
state
 to maintain and operate all the facilities and services.
This
 leads to dissatisfaction in the
people
's minds.
Such
 developments bring many hardships for
people
 across all sections of society.
Finally
, the economic growth of the
state
 stops and it can become a backward or underdeveloped part of the world.
On the other hand
, some conservationists argue that governments do not utilize tax income in proper ways.
Moreover
, the money is generally wasted on scams and corruption. They
also
 assert that the ratio of expenditure to earnings is increasing every day so they cannot afford to pay a big pie of their income in the form of tax. All in all, I believe that it is essential for states to earn from
taxes
 to keep the development of the country on track.
That is
 why we must pay
taxes
 because we are going to be reciprocated by the
state
 in the form of facilities and services.
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  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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