in their advertising, businnesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. why is this ? do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Over the
last
two or three decades the way that business is done has changed dramatically
due to
major advancements in technology because of
this
most associations choose advertising to promote their
products
or services. These days advertising has a significant impact on
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community's minds.
As a result
these days traders are using promotions to show that their manufacturers a fashionable in some way ,
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is
this
positive or are there more drawbacks? In
this
essay, I will explore the pros and cons of advertising and try to draw some conclusions. I will start by looking at the disadvantages. One of the major disadvantages of publicising is, the public may keep their trust in the wrong
products
. There could be some items with low quality but with attractive advertising.
this
may lead to choosing the incorrect item with low standards. Especially some children can think the most attractively published
products
are healthier. Not only the children but
also
the adults. Certainly, they are forcing their parents to buy those
products
. Choosing the wrong product can be seen as a major disadvantage of advertising.
Secondly
, the main cons of publicising
is
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club may lose their profits. There could be some financially stable traders. For those investing a large amount of cash in promoting doesn't cause any problem.
Therefore
they may invest a lot and advertise their low-quality
products
,
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this
is a forgery. But society
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not aware of
this
due to
this
type of forgery party, Agile company's businesses may decline considerably and they lost their profits. On the other ,hand folk will get to know about the new arrival
products
and brands which are currently available in the competitive market. Most startup
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rely on advertisements where they can introduce their fresh manufacturers. In recent years folk leading a haptic lifestyle. Since they can't spend much time analyzing what's new these days. But through the
,
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promotions they can simply recognise the new
products
.
To conclude
there is a positive and negative impact on publicizing in spite of that personally I believe the disadvantages of promotion overweigh the advantages
due to
choosing the wrong product and
also
the profit loss of good nature group. But
also
we can be aware of the new arrival. I believe
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should take the necessary to get to know what is good and bad.
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