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Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It would be argued by some that starting early and maintaining a permanent
job
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 can help
people
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 easily get more satisfaction than changing jobs frequently. From my perspective, I partly agree with
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 phenomenon. One of the great benefits for
people
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 choosing a
job
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 early and keeping it is having goals to pursue and devoting themselves to it. Some
people
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 find their passions and interests in a certain
job
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, which can help them make efforts to develop themselves comprehensively to reach some achievements.
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, they will have more opportunities to advance in their careers
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 get a permanent
job
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.
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, when many children have often dreamed of becoming scientists or popular characters, they have to practice for a long time
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 maintain their interests to accomplish it in the future.
On the other hand
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, there are some optimistic reasons why
people
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 have a tendency to change their work frequently.
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, changing jobs helps them meet new friends, and
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 in new workplaces, which can help them develop themselves more in many aspects of their lives and challenge their limitations.
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,
people
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 usually try a diverse range of jobs to find out ones which they are passionate about and are most suitable for themselves
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 to gain more
experiences
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 in many fields. To demonstrate, many
people
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 often think about a certain well-paying
job
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 and try to
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do it
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, but after that, they find it unfitting and not their forte. In conclusion, both approaches bring many different benefits and can lead to satisfying
career
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 in the future. I think that it is up to the individual to decide which approach is best for them.
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