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The two maps illustrate the small

city

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center

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centre

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, which is called Islip as it is now, and improving

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apply

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in the future.

Overall

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, there will be many changes in Islip town

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center

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centre

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in the future.

Firstly

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, the main

road

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will be removed, and a standard

road

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will be built like a

round about

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roundabout

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and

also

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some

shops

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will be replaced with new buildings and there will be added area for pedestrians. Other things will not be changed. Nowadays, there is a main

road

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in the countryside and

also

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there are plenty of

shops

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around the main

road

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. The first housing is located in the

city

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center

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centre

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and the second housing is built in the south of town.

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, there is located school next to the second housing in the western-south of the

city

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and

also

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park

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the park

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is built in the eastern-south of town. When it comes to additional modifications in

plan

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the plan

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. The main

road

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and

shops

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will be replaced with a bus station, shopping

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center

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centre

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, car

park

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and new housing.

Besides

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, first housing will be moved to the western-south of the

city

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and

also

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there will be developed

shops

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in the

city

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center

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centre

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Moreover

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area

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an area

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will be added for pedestrians and

also

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new housing will be developed next to the

park

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and there

will not be changed nothing

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will not be changed anything

will be changed nothing

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school

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the school

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, second housing and

park

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, center, road, shops, park with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.

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6
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

225 words

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The maps below show Colwick arts centre in 2005 and today.

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