Transport delays are a widespread phenomenon in many cities today. What are the causes of this problem, and how could the situation be improved?

bus, private vehicle, comfortable, the number plane, procedure, baggage, read more There are some transport delays in many
city
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recently. In my point of view, the main causes are the
unstandart
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standard
of the
tranportation
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transportation
condition
as well as
the lack of information
to
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the passengers.
However
, it can
be fix
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by adding more facilities and bringing more information via social media. In
this
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I will explain the causes of the
trasport
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transport
delays with some possibilities to fix
this
condition
.
Initialy
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Initially
,
transportaion
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transportation
is a main factor in
this
face pace work. It would reduce the time to commute
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to
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decades ago when people should walk to move to
the
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another place.
However
, recently, there are many delays when people want to use mass transportation
due to
the
unschedule
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unscheduled
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departure.
For example
, in Indonesia, where bus is the main transportation used by
commuter
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commuters
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in
this
country. They
dont
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don't
have fix schedule because
tehre
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there
are so many traffic jams
due to
the growth of
the
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private vehicles.
Although
government
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have increased the number of buses, people prefer to choose private transport because of their safety and
comfortmity
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conformity
. The lack of
the
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safe and
comfort
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aspects that government should take more
concern
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about it if they want to reduce the delay.
This
condition
bring
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the
domino's
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effect.
As a result
, rather than increase the number of buses,
government
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should pay
attetion
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attention
on
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the bus
condition
that leads to the
raise
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rise
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of
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passenger numbers.
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