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Social media such as Facebook, Twitter, or Instagram has replaced face to face communication in our everyday life. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages.

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The modes of communication have altered the ways of interaction with friends and families as social websites allow people to video call and talk frequently. In
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 with, innovations in technology have brought ample benefits to the
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 of users in plenty of ways. To commence with, it has made it possible to communicate with
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 relatives or family members on a daily basis,
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, it could eradicate the problem of homesickness among migrators.
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, during the pandemic,
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 the whole world was forced to stay inside their houses, social media was merely a source to talk with loved ones.
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, introverted people, who do not have enough confidence to address strangers, could make new companions through online chatting.
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, there are a few drawbacks faced by the masses as it does not involve direct communication.
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, the masses are not aware of the reality of their friends as they have never talked with each other in their real lives,
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, there are glitches in love and companionship.
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, online hacking and blackmailing have become a threat to the privacy of users, in fact, youngsters are found victims of
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, a plethora of youngsters
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 suicide each year,
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 cyberbullying or leak of personal information. In conclusion, these days, new sources of communication have improved the bondings with the knowns living miles apart,
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, because of long screening hours youngsters merely interact with their loved ones. In my opinion, it has more advantages than disadvantages as these problems could be overcome by improving security.

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