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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are several arguments concerning whether
people
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 should repeat their regular
habits
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 to prevent changes rather than the consistent redevelopment of them.
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 my personal standpoint, our
life
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 will not be better if we reject the
experiences
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 of new things for the following reasons. On one hand, the inherent sense of comfort a person has will be retained and prevent them from performing possible mistakes if they follow their familiar
habits
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. In fact, many
people
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 seem to have the tendency to repeat things they have done in the past just
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 the fear of negative effects that may occur when they are unable to cope with sudden issues which may act as a deterioration in their personal
life
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 and in terms of mentality.
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, the probability of social isolation and not catching up with the continual improvement of the era is higher in
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 way, because they are not willing to face unexpected issues when
try
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 new
experiences
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.
On the other hand
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, renewing our personal aspects and
habits
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 may provide an abundance of opportunities for
life
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. The reason is that there are always limitations that appear even if we find something is our best choice;
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, continually stepping out of our comfort zone will help us to find alternative
habits
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 or
experiences
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 to develop skills and knowledge and not to repeat mistakes.
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,
replacement
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a replacement
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 will offer the chance to adapt and self-develop promptly with the evolution of society and the era. In the past, note-taking was the most common type of keeping knowledge and lessons in school;
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, in today's era,
people
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 who are able to utilise technology
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 as computers witness better productivity than
people
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 who are still physically taking
note
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notes
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 on
papers
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paper
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.
Take
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 everything into consideration,
i
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I
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 believe keeping things modernise and renew
provide
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provides
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 huge advantages for our personal
life
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 when we not only be able to cope with any immediate improvement of the world but
also
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 widen crucial
experiences
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 without being eliminated from the society
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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