The maps below show the future plan about the Biology School in a particular university

The maps below show the future plan about the Biology School in a particular university
The map
has
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illustrates the future plan for a Biology School in a particular university.
Overall
,
it is clear that
indoor
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the indoor
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sports hall, café and central library remain unchanged. But in the
future
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the forest area will
be raze
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be razed
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to
built
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build
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classrooms and
car
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a car
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park for
staffs
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staff
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. From an
overall
perspective,
it is clear that
the tree in the middle of the road will be cut down and built into
office
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an office
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and lab. At the bottom left of the road, trees
cut
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were cut
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down to
built
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build
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a car park for
staffs
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staff
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.
Drama
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The drama
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centre will
replaced
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replace
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a
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the
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music centre. It can be seen from the map, in the future the IT centre will be big and there will be one more teaching building.
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