The maps below show the future plan about the Biology School in a particular university

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The map

has

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apply

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illustrates the future plan for a Biology School in a particular university.

Overall

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it is clear that

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indoor

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the indoor

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sports hall, café and central library remain unchanged. But in the

future

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,future

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the forest area will

be raze

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be razed

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built

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build

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classrooms and

car

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a car

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park for

staffs

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staff

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. From an

overall

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perspective,

it is clear that

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the tree in the middle of the road will be cut down and built into

office

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an office

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and lab. At the bottom left of the road, trees

cut

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were cut

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down to

built

Wrong verb form

build

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a car park for

staffs

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staff

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Drama

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The drama

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centre will

replaced

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replace

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the

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music centre. It can be seen from the map, in the future the IT centre will be big and there will be one more teaching building.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that, overall".

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

121 words

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The maps below show the future plan about the Biology School in a particular university

In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence.What are your opinions?

Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

The money spent on space research has brought enormous benefits to mankind, but it could be more usefully applied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries today, people are having their first child when they are older. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?