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Some people like to listen to music while working or studying. Others find that they need silence to focus. What is your preference? Why do you find the other option unhelpful?

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Nowadays, there are a variety of methods to concentrate on addressing tasks. In relation to
this
, some argue that listening to
music
 is beneficial to do so
while
 others require a peaceful environment.
This
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music
 allows
people
, including me, to relieve stress and
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avoid overthinking and boredom. Doing routine tasks in workplaces and schools is undeniably tedious. In more detail, listening to
music
while
 working is likely to make
people
 more productive since they do not need to consider
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 sights
whether
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 they create
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 or not. It will hide under the sound of
music
.
Moreover
, when individuals feel tired or sleepy, hearing
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favorites
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 songs
as well as
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 songs is effective to recharge their energy.
Furthermore
,
this
 can be gathered
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 employees through sharing their preferences. Concurrently, I am of the view that making
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 place gives individuals negative impacts. Primarily, humans easily lose their concentration when they
can’t hear nothing
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 even white noise. In fact, individuals worry about bothering others
while
 they are focusing
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 plates. Specifically, the tiny amount of sounds can be bigger in silent places because
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there are no factors to produce noise.
Therefore
, just moving and taking notes are able to interrupt one’s attention.
In addition
, it is able to rise the gap among
people
due to
 the fact that it can block
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 interaction. In a nutshell,
although
 the effort of making non-noise places is understandable for me, I believe that appreciating
music
 in their area is more effective to advance their efficiency and to make
people
 more cooperative.
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