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Do you agree or disagree with the following statements? zoos are not useful for everyone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#statements #zoos #support
Disagree - Zoo is useful for everyone (more or less) - having plenty of
animals
 inside zoos, it is useful for everyone to understand those
animals
'
behavior
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behaviour
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 for
one
's knowledge in order to ... world of nature - Some of them are wildlife and dangerous, it is great to know which
one
 is dangerous and learn how to survive
from
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apply
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being attacked ex. If you stuck in
Amazon
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the Amazon
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 forest - Embrace the biodiversity of our world. It
is
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discussed
by
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someone that zoos are not useful for everyone I definitely disagree with
this
 statement and the reasons are provided below. First of all, living together in families or communities
resulting
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 in being socially separated from other
animals
 makes people
have
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lack
of
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knowledge about them.
Hence
, having plenty of
animals
 inside
zoo
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a zoo
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 not only wildlife but
also
 pets,
it
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is useful for
one's
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one
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 to recognize them in order to increase their general knowledge capacities.
Moreover
, the more people know
animals'
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about animals'
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behavior
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, the more they understand about nature of our world.
For example
, Sloth, being originally in America continent, is
one
 of the slowest mammals on earth.
Secondly
,
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