The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?
The trend of buying online can cause all the stores to shut down permanently. There is a heavy debate about whether it would happen or not.
On the one hand, purchasing goods from websites offers more options to choose from without visiting multiple stores.
For instance
, on the Amazon website, there are a lot of varieties available for the purchaser and not only that it allows buyers to compare the products manufactured by different companies to know which is better for them. These facilities help the buyer to buy the right thing without having to go to different shops. Moreover
, online buyers can order things sitting on their couches without the hustle of travelling thereby saving lots of time.
However
, there is a high risk of fraudulent activities on websites which can cause a user to lose their money. For example
, if individuals buy anything online using their credit card, then
they may get scammed by the hackers who will be monitoring the website. Besides
, there can be trust issues related to the products bought from the sites as sometimes the quality will not be as same as shown on the website.
To sum up
, preferring websites over in-person stores for buying things can be more flexible and time-saving as it can provide various selections in one place which can be performed from the comfort of home. But sometimes these sites cannot be trusted due to
the scams which can be a potential disadvantage for the user. However
, the advantages outcome the disadvantages will make the in-person outlets vanish in the near future.Submitted by hassan05.quadri on
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Make sure to explicitly state your stance (agree or disagree) on the topic more clearly in the introduction and conclusion.
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Include more specific examples to support each point you make. For example, mention actual cases where stores have closed due to online competition.
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Check for minor grammatical errors and improve sentence variety to make your writing more engaging.
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Try to make the structure of your essay clearer by using transitional phrases effectively. This will help the reader to follow your arguments more easily.
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Ensure that your conclusion directly addresses the main points raised in your essay, and reiterate your stance clearly.
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The essay provides a balanced discussion of the pros and cons of online shopping.
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You offer clear and relevant reasons for your points, making your arguments easy to understand.
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