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On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of the company – describe the item lost – explain how you lost it – tell the insurance company what you would like them to do You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam, Write at least 150 words.

#holiday #item #travel #insurance #cost #manager #company #addresses #sir #madam
Dear Sir , I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I lost my
laptop
while
 I was travelling with my children to Mexico for my
friend
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 wedding . It is
white
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a white
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color
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laptop
 and the name of the company is Samsung . The cover of
laptop
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the laptop
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 is blue with
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smile character on its back . It is small in size with waterproof material . I
also
 taken travel insurance with it and I have printed
as well as
 an email copy of my insurance . I
rembered
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remembered
 that I
seperated
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separated
 my personal items
in
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 different
bag
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 and we were struggling to find a room for them ,so ,
air
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the air
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 hostess helped me to put my personal belongings into the corner of the plane .
However
 , When I arrived at the baggage area
then
i
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 was not able to find my personal bag which
contain
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 the most valuable item
that
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 was my
laptop
. I would really appreciate
if
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it if
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 you
can
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 contact your staff and
start
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 inquire about
this
 item . I have important work information
in
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on
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this
laptop
 which
i
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I
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 need to submit
my
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to my
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 boss for
company's
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 deal .
According to
 the insurance policy , I can claim for personal item value anytime if your team
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is unsuccessfull
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unsuccessfull
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unsuccessful
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to find
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 it within 24 hours window. I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Roopkamal Kaur
Submitted by kmlchahal97 on

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Spelling
Ensure to proofread your writing for small errors in spelling, such as 'remembered' instead of 'rembered', to enhance clarity.
Organization
Consider organizing your letter into clear paragraphs to improve readability, with each paragraph focusing on a specific aspect of your issue.
Punctuation
Be mindful of punctuation and avoid run-on sentences. Breaking up complex ideas into shorter, clearer sentences can improve understandability.
Description
Your letter vividly describes the lost item, making it easier for the reader to understand its importance.
Task Response
You clearly stated what you would like the insurance company to do, which is crucial for achieving the task's objective.
Tone
The polite tone and formal language used throughout the letter are appropriate for the context and add to its overall effectiveness.
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