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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some groups of people have their attitude about some kind of careers,
such
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 as
doctors
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 and
engineers
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 are capable of doing
their
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 duties they desire anywhere,
while
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 others think that these occupations should be allowed to
work
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 in the
country
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 where they graduated. In my opinion, I completely believe that these professionals should be allowed to
work
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 in
other
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another country
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country
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. On the one hand, working in a
country
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 where people speak the same language brings greater benefits to the workers, especially
doctors
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 and
engineers
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. In
this
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 case, it would be better if these professionals can communicate with their patients or colleagues in their mother tongues.
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, in all cases at an emergency unit, patients come with severe sicknesses. It goes without saying that by speaking in the same language,
doctors
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 will directly diagnose and give the right treatment without
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 barrier.
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, I believe that it is
worthy
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 for healthcare and engineering workers can have opportunities to
work
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 in another
country
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. If
doctors
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 and
engineers
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 can
work
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 around the world, they will save more people’s lives.
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,
engineers
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 would support the locals by starting to construct or refurbish as soon as they can.
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, countries where their citizens suffer from
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war and massive bomb attacks in terms of physical and mental illness
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 will be resulted in many injury cases
as well as
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 destroyed buildings.
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,
this
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 high demand for these careers is highly needed to support neighbouring countries. In conclusion, it seems to me that both
doctors
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 and
engineers
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 deserve to have independent
work
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 in another
country
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, not only in their hometown. As
doctors
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 can maintain people’s lives,
engineers
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 can support
construction
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 and rebuilding
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accommodation
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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