Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some groups of people have their attitude about some kind of careers,
such
as doctors
and engineers
are capable of doing their
duties they desire anywhere, Change the word
the
while
others think that these occupations should be allowed to work
in the country
where they graduated. In my opinion, I completely believe that these professionals should be allowed to work
in other
Change the wording
another country
other countries
country
.
On the one hand, working in a country
where people speak the same language brings greater benefits to the workers, especially doctors
and engineers
. In this
case, it would be better if these professionals can communicate with their patients or colleagues in their mother tongues. For example
, in all cases at an emergency unit, patients come with severe sicknesses. It goes without saying that by speaking in the same language, doctors
will directly diagnose and give the right treatment without language
barrier.
Add an article
a language
the language
On the other hand
, I believe that it is worthy
for healthcare and engineering workers can have opportunities to Replace the word
worthwhile
work
in another country
. If doctors
and engineers
can work
around the world, they will save more people’s lives. Also
, engineers
would support the locals by starting to construct or refurbish as soon as they can. For instance
, countries where their citizens suffer from a
war and massive bomb attacks in terms of physical and mental illnessRemove the article
apply
,
will be resulted in many injury cases Remove the comma
apply
as well as
destroyed buildings. Thus
, this
high demand for these careers is highly needed to support neighbouring countries.
In conclusion, it seems to me that both doctors
and engineers
deserve to have independent work
in another country
, not only in their hometown. As doctors
can maintain people’s lives, engineers
can support construction
and rebuilding Correct article usage
the construction
Change preposition
of accommodation
accommodation
.Fix the agreement mistake
accommodations
Submitted by rawiwan_biozoo on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+
Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!