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In many countries, children are given a lot of homework. Is it a positive or a negative trend?

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Today, the students are facing a variety of challenges,
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 and pressures at an unprecedented level, by their teachers. I believe that it is both detrimental and beneficial in equal measure. There are valid reasons why it might be argued that giving a lot of
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 is a negative trend. In fact, one of the main objectives of schools is to help students prepare for exams,
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children
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 a large part of the day for preparing exams.
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 of
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, many
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 have problems with health issues, and
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 a mindset. If
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 cannot take a rest or do not provide with well- being. That notwithstanding, giving a lot of
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 comes with a number of positives.
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, a school class lasts for about 40-45 minutes in many countries and
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 time is not enough to explain the topic and work with students. That's why,
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-giving can be seen as an extra lesson.
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, doing
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 teaches important skills
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 as being responsible, leadership and independent. These traits are useful in their whole life.
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, in the university or workplace when they are facing problems and
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 decisions by themselves.
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, giving more home tasks to
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 has pros and cons,
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, on the one hand , because of more tasks,
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 can be tedious,
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, it helps them to make a decision for themselves in the future. That's why, I believe that it is as much a change for the better as it is for the worse.
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Ensure that the introduction clearly presents your stance on the topic. Avoid using vague language like 'detrimental and beneficial in equal measure'.
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