You and your friend have booked tickets to go to the theatre. You are now unable to go but have found another friend to accompany him/her instead. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter, •explain why you can not go to the theatre with your friend •say who can go instead of you •tell them why you think this person would be good to go with
Dear Arsh,
I hope you are doing great. Unfortunately, I am writing
this
letter to inform you that I am not available to go with you to watch a movie on Friday. Therefore
, I have a plan that my cousin will go with you instead
of me. I hope you do not mind about it.
Firstly
, I was very excited to meet you but my manager called me and told me that I would go to the airport to pick him up on Friday evening. Secondly
, He said we would go directly to the office from the airport as he scheduled an urgent meeting with the staff. In addition
, the project manager will discuss about new project which will take more hours, So I do not know about the exact time.
Moreover
, my cousin John is an outgoing person and has a similar interest in Bollywood movies as you. Therefore
, it is better if I give the ticket to my cousin as you will enjoy quality time with him. I believe you will like him and I will manage time next week to meet you.
Best Regards,
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the information is organized in a more logical manner with consistent use of paragraphing, so each paragraph presents a single clear idea.
task achievement
To improve task achievement, make sure to respond fully to all parts of the prompt. While the candidate did include explanations and suggests an alternative person, more detail could be added to fully round out the writing.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite