Your child is going on a school trip abroad for three days and the headmaster of the school has asked any parents if they would like to come along to assist. You would like to go. Write a letter to the headmaster. In your letter: Say why you would like to go Suggest what you could do to help during the trip Ask some further questions about the trip

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Dear Mr Peterson, I am writing to you regarding the upcoming

trip

to Germany for which you are looking for parents to accompany the children. I am delighted to volunteer to help out. I am Michael's father and during the

trip

, I would be off work for a couple of days,

therefore

, the

trip

will occupy my time, and it would be great to assist. As you are aware, I am mostly involved in the various activities the school undertakes, and

this

would be one where I would gladly be able to assist. I believe that my knowledge of the city of Hamburg and my fluent

Germany

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would be valuable to children, which can make me an additional tour guide. Would you kindly send me the full itinerary?

This

will help me prepare for the

trip

in advance. I

also

need to know the number of helpers you are expecting

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This

will guide me in knowing how much work input is expected from me. I look forward to hearing from you soon, Yours Sincerely Kennedy Marizani

Submitted by mmarizani on Thu Aug 10 2023

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

176 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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