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car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars?

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These days there is a concern with respect to owning a private
car
 and
this
 idea has gained significant attention among the governments
due to
 its effects impact on the environment and traffic congestion. I will examine all of the perspectives before presenting my own opinion. On the one hand, the
car
 has been used for a long time by humankind and it has become an integral part of our lives. One of the primary reasons increasing number of private vehicles is that people use private
cars
 rather than other alternatives
such
 as buses, subways or ferries.
However
, it has a paramount impact on time consumption because a person who lives in a metropolitan city could get caught in a traffic jam regardless of the time.
In addition
, there is another concern about environmental issues.
For instance
,
according to
 the
last
 research, carried out by the experts shown that the fume is releasing
cars
 is poisoning and led to air pollution that threats our lives and plane.
Thus
, for all of these ,reasons the
car
 that takes the road should be limited by the governments. To tackle these challenges, several viable solutions can be implemented.
Firstly
, an increase in the private
car
 axes could be effective in addressing reduce the rate of
the
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car
 traffic.
For example
, unless individuals should pay more high
tax
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 they would drive their
cars
.
On the other hand
, constructing alternative and new underground systems presents a promising approach to combat increasing
car
 rates.
On the
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 grounds that, citizens who live in suburbs have no chance to use local vehicles and they use their private
cars
 as a resort to the lack of
transportation
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 system.
Thus
,
government
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 provides more funds in order to enhance transportation systems. In conclusion, the problems associated with private
cars
 require urgent attention. By adopting
increased
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 tax rate and building a new alternative transportation system and the government can make significant strides towards resolving
this
 problem.
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