Nowadays, an increasing number of people with health problems are using alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their normal doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative developmment?

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number of individuals with health issues are utilizing non-conventional
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and therapies rather than visiting their normal
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trend is harmful
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people
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because
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do not undergo
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beneficial in emergency cases, and
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discourage
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to visit
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doctor
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and treatments can have
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adverse
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influence
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people
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health.
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medicines
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authorities control, which
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medicines
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can have unknown side effects on
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people
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health.
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,
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tretments
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treatments
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yoga, and meditation can make
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more vulnerable to
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serious pain in their muscles or even lead to death.
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,
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medicines
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and therapies are not advantageous in emergency cases.
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is because
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medicines
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and therapies need more time to mitigate pain and help
patients
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to
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recovery
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people
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who get heart
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need
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conventional
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like
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western medications because these medications work faster and better than
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medicines
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, I believe
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visiting
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doctor
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is
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extremely
important for all
patients
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is because doctors are qualified to deal with
patients
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and give
patients
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appropriate medications.
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, I believe
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mediciens
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medicines
medicine
and
tretments
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treatments
treatment
is detrimental for
patients
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because
it
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discourage
patients
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to
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visiting normal
doctor
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, I completely think
alternative
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medicines
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and treatments is adverse development because it not under
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of
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the government
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, it not useful for emergency cases, and
it
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demotivate
people
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to visit
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an ordinary
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doctor
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