many governments think that economic progress is most important goal. some people however think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Economic development has been known as an important criterion for assessing

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promotion.

Although

some people consider financial improvement as a priority among all

sectors

, others believe that there is no priority and other parts

such

as health, education, politics,

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et cetera have the same significance. In

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I will discuss both views and clarify why I believe other

sectors

have importance as economic in the society. First of all,

economy

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and its related issues play a crucial role in all societies, and governments should allocate

budget

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and make policies to develop

this

part. If a

country

struggles with financial problems, it will have deficiencies in other

sectors

.

For instance

, a

country

such

as Afghanistan

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is one

the

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underprivileged countries, has numerous problems in other parts

such

as security, health and education.

For

this

reason,

economy

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is vital to survive nations.

On the other hand

, authorities should not ignore other crucial

sectors

which can determine the destiny of that society.

Although

wealthy countries encounter lesser

problem

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in

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with deprived countries, mismanagement and do not pay attention to other parts can prevent achieving sustainable development.

For instance

, imagine a rich

country

with huge amounts of financial resources that their authorities are not resourceful, after a

while

since they do not pay attention to education, they will lose whatever they own, and

country

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become weak and weaker.

Therefore

, by applying proper policies toward all

sectors

, nations would be able to promote.

To sum up

, promotion in finance attending lots of attention;

however

,

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on

this

part should not interfere

other

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vital

sectors

which are essential for permanent progress. In my opinion, other

sectors

are as important as

economy

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an economy

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that should be invested by authorities.