many governments think that economic progress is most important goal. some people however think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Economic development has been known as an important criterion for assessing
nations
promotion. Change noun form
nations'
nation's
Although
some people consider financial improvement as a priority among all sectors
, others believe that there is no priority and other parts such
as health, education, politics, and
et cetera have the same significance. In Correct word choice
apply
this
essay
I will discuss both views and clarify why I believe other Add a comma
,essay
sectors
have importance as economic in the society.
First of all, economy
and its related issues play a crucial role in all societies, and governments should allocate Correct article usage
the economy
budget
and make policies to develop Fix the agreement mistake
budgets
this
part. If a country
struggles with financial problems, it will have deficiencies in other sectors
. For instance
, a country
such
as Afghanistan where
is one Correct word choice
which
the
underprivileged countries, has numerous problems in other parts Change preposition
of the
such
as security, health and education. For
this
reason, economy
is vital to survive nations.
Add an article
the economy
On the other hand
, authorities should not ignore other crucial sectors
which can determine the destiny of that society. Although
wealthy countries encounter lesser problem
in Fix the agreement mistake
problems
compare
with deprived countries, mismanagement and do not pay attention to other parts can prevent achieving sustainable development. Replace the word
comparison
For instance
, imagine a rich country
with huge amounts of financial resources that their authorities are not resourceful, after a while
since they do not pay attention to education, they will lose whatever they own, and country
become weak and weaker. Correct article usage
the country
Therefore
, by applying proper policies toward all sectors
, nations would be able to promote.
To sum up
, promotion in finance attending lots of attention; however
, concentrate
on Wrong verb form
concentrating
this
part should not interfere other
vital Change preposition
with other
sectors
which are essential for permanent progress. In my opinion, other sectors
are as important as economy
that should be invested by authorities.Add an article
an economy
the economy
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