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Students today can easily access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely argued that access to all information on the internet nowadays is so easy that the role of traditional libraries is no longer important.
While
 I accept that
this
 search method has many benefits for students, I
also
 believe that
such
 institutions still meet their research needs and are hard to
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. On the one hand, students choosing to look for information from online sources could be beneficial to them as a whole. The first thing is a huge amount of knowledge stored from online sources.
Moreover
,
this
 data is updated fast and frequently. They can find all kinds of knowledge they need from world history to update events in real life.
For example
, it is much easier to research the impact of the
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 pandemic on the current economy from smart devices than from any physical institutions. The second benefit of
this
 search way is that it is very convenient and fast. Researching can be flexibly
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 whenever they want, at home, at a café, in class, etc.
This
 helps students save a lot of time and spend hours looking for books or searching for data from materials there.
For instance
, Google, which can be considered a popular search tool
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today, needs
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less than one second to show
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hundreds of results from keywords for free. It is clearly much faster than any traditional one.
On the other hand
, there are a host of compelling reasons why I am convinced that libraries are an indispensable part of each student. First and foremost, you can not make sure all the knowledge and news on the Internet are reliable. Administrators can easily post and adjust the content on the websites. Some sites
such
 as Wiki even allow visitors to change the existing contents on the site.
Furthermore
, paying fees is often required for accessing valuable academic sources because of copyright matters. Meanwhile, people can access them at school athenaeums for free. When I was a student, I used to choose these destinations to find economic studies written by famous authors.
This
 type of data is hard to find on online platforms without a user account provided by physical institutions.
Additionally
, it was mostly free of charge for pupils of the school. In conclusion,
while
 it is irrefutable that the Internet is of paramount importance to pupils, I would contend that it still remains an issue as analyzed above that can not replace the role of traditional athenaeums.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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