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Describe an invention that changed people's lives. What it does (or, how it it used): How popular it is among people of different ages: And explain why (or how) you think it changed people's lives:

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Those past decades have appeared a wide range of great inventions. The invention that changed human life I would like to tell you about is the
smartphone
. It was invented in 1993 and has been one of the most revolutionary creations. When it comes to how it is used, well, I would say the
smartphone
 has brought about enormous advantages to different aspects of our lives. We can use it mainly for contacting friends, family, and colleagues as it is convenient to quickly access the contact list and dial numbers.
In addition
, cell phones can service our work. Joining meetings on Zoom or Teams application on cell phones to work are
also
 our frequent activities which are well supported by the strong processing core of the phone. Because of its benefits, it's made for everyone from the young to the elderly.
However
, the young often have the habit of choosing modern and stylish smartphones like iPhone or Samsung which can take very beautiful photos to post on social networks
such
 as Facebook or Instagram,
while
 the elderly tend to choose affordable smartphones like Oppo or Huawei products, to receive calls from their offsprings. And year, when it comes to why I think it changed human life, I would say that the
smartphone
 has really made a great difference in the way we live. It has revolutionized communication, access to a huge information, and the way we interact with the world. The
smartphone
 has become an essential device, empowering individuals and connecting communities globally. It was really beneficial.
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