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Studies show that many criminals have a low level of education. For this reason, people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they can get a job when leave prison. Do you agree or disagree?

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Researches illustrate that many felons have a low level of education.
Therefore
, individuals think that the better method to minimize
crime
 is to educate
people
 in jail so they can get a job when leave jail. I totally agree with
this
 statement because putting
criminals
 behind bars can bring many benefits
inclduing
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including
,
deterrence
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including deterrence
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, and rehabilitation
offenders
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of offenders
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.
To begin
 with, I completely believe keeping
criminals
 in imprisonment can bring many advantages .
To begin
 ,
prison
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a prison
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 sentence is
the
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an
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 effective way to mitigate the rate of
crime
 in
community
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the community
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.
This
 is because
prison
sentence
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sentences
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deter
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deters
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 other
people
 to turn for
crime
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crimes
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, which
this
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apply
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can make
people
 think twice before
enganging
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engaging
 in illegal behaviour.
In addition
,
prison
 is a better opportunity for the
governments
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government
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 to educate offenders about what
right
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is right
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 and wrong.
For example
, the government can organize educational campaigns in
prison
 in order to teach
criminals
 moral values.
As a result
, raising awareness among felons can make
criminals
a good citizens
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good citizens
a good citizen
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 when they release .
Furthermore
, in
prison
authority
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authorities
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 can provide education and
vocotional
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vocational
 training for
criminals
.
For instance
, the authority in
prison
 can allow
criminals
 to complete their
study
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studies
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in
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at
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 university or school, which
this
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apply
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can contribute to
help
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helping
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criminals
 to improve themselves.
Consequntly
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Consequently
, when the offenders
releases
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release
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 they will are more likely to get a better job
opportunity
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opportunities
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 because they have enough education and skills.
To sum up
, I strongly believe
prison
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the prison
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 sentence is
efficient
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an efficient
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 method to alleviate
rate
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the rate
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 of
crime
 in society because it
bring
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brings
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 many benefits namely,
deter
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deterring
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 other
people
 to commit
crime
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a crime
the crime
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 , and rehabilitation of
criminals
 to become
a good citizens
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good citizens
a good citizen
show examples
 and
help
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helping
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 them to find
a
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apply
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better professional life.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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