The pie chart below shows the main reason why agriculutural land become less productive. The table shows how these causes effected three regions of the world during the 1900s
This
provided chart illustrates the essential causes that result in a reduction in the production of agricultural land
in three different places. Overall
, it can be seen that there were four main factors, which degraded the land
in the three provided contents, but the land
of Oceania
was only affected by two of them.
To begin
, the highest percentage of land
deterioration occurred in Europe, at 23%, which was about four times more than in North America. In addition
to that, the accountability of deforestation for land
deterioration was, at 30% which made it the second reason. Even though forest demolition was the primary reason for land
degradation in Europe, at 9.8%, it was the least factor that harm the land
in the other two locations.
Although
over-grazing accounted for 35% of land
degradation, it was considered the last
factor in Europe that ruined the land
, at 5.5%, and it was the first harmful reason to the Earth in Oceania
, at 11.3%.
Furthermore
, over-cultivation was responsible for 28% of land
damage, hence
; it was the biggest factor that degraded the land
in North America, but it did not have any detrimental effect on the land
in Oceania
. Finally
, the total degraded land
in Oceania
was 13% whereas
it was 5% in North America. And there were some other reasons for land
deterioration which represented 7%.Submitted by sm710129 on
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